“Revamping a Research Paper: Strengthening Content, Organization, and Academic Language”

I have this research paper that I need due before the period tomorrow. It’s been written out, and its my first one therefore Im struggling and the teacher provided feedbacks to which I need to rewrite the WHOLE thing. To earn the points that I’ve lost I need to fix the things he point out. Basically this isn’t a research paper, he says. I need to have citations in correct format because I don’t cite my facts. I need to provide facts and not opinion statement and cite off that. I need citations in paper on work cited page (so on…) and my introduction and topic sentence and everything else like transition is not smooth. it’s not organized in other words. I also need more academic language, and strong depth of content. I also cannot tie back to today and must stay in historical time period of my research paper. He also points out some of these don’t make sense and some are irrelavent in this paper. I also need specific facts and keep tying it back to claim. He wants me to prove and have paragraphs to support my topic. Must elaborate. “THis is not a research paper. Back your claim up with specific facts. more academic langauge and stay in the time period.” Do you think you can help me rewrite? I feel like half of these pages are uneeded because they’re just put there for the sake of it. I will share you my rough draft where I’ve named every part out for you to know easier and see if you can work based on that.