“Enhancing the Discussion and Results of a Master’s Thesis: A Critical Analysis and Revision”

This is a master’s thesis.
I would like help in enriching the discussion and commenting on the results.
I already filed once and got cut, this is the second and last chance.
I am attaching the paper as originally submitted with some minor changes (I will proceed with others in the remaining parts of the paper) and the comments from the tutor’s evaluation.