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1.You do not have a standalone cover page which is required in the assignment instructions. 2. Introduction: No header which is required in the assignment instructions. 3. Your introduction is more like an executive summary. A statement like “This project will serve as an analysis that drives the decision process of where and why to build a new hotel” can be included in the intro. 4. ‘Tourists from across the globe usually flock to Portland to enjoy various tourist destinations, including cultural attractions, popular events, nature beauty, and food and beverage scenes.’ – You did not cite it. Where did you pull this information from? 5. No indentation is needed in an APA intro. 6. 1234 NW Pearl Street, Portland, OR 97045: Please double check if this is a real address. I also recommend you show figures (e.g., map) in the locations section. 7. Idea Part II: This section is missing. 8. Idea Part I and III: You need to present your ideas specific to what specific brand/flag works for your chosen location, for what reasons. You provide the general description of two hotel brands. Remember the purpose of a white paper is not conveying the general information or education. Feasibility Studies are what we conduct for owners who are investing tens of millions of dollars. You are missing the necessary information in the Ideas section – justification! Why did you select these locations? Why did you select these two brands rather than other major brands? This document is the first phase of your feasibility study. Feasibility Studies are what we conduct for owners who are investing huge amount of money. Your white paper cannot be persuasive without justifications. You need to improve Ideas section by explaining why location/brand matters for hotel investment and adding depth. Think from the investors’ perspective. Does your location section attract your investors? 9. Good you have a reference list. You need to fix the citation from online sources though. Learn from Purdue OWL website. This is an easy fix! 10. I believe you put efforts into this project. You put analysis as well. However, there is a lack of depth of analysis. I would like to see more numerical indicators, more writing like an HVS report would read. I believe you can improve! You have some decent analysis pieces, but not persuasive enough due to the absence of justification. As I said earlier, Feasibility Studies are what we conduct for owners who are investing tens of millions of dollars. What they care most about is financial indicators. The key is – Are you interested in investing in this hotel after reading this report as an investment party? 11. You can re-submit your assignment to improve your manuscript if you prefer. Most importantly, you need to read the assignment instructions thoroughly to ensure you do not miss any required components. Your actual grade will be based on the improved version. To clarify, your current grade will be replaced with a new one if your second submission is better. Let’s focus on learning rather than mere evaluation. As we’re nearing the end of our degree, I expect more from our students, as I believe you do too. This is a great start, but I know you can do better! 12. Let’s build a luxury hotel (you still need to present a specific brand/flag for your feasibility study topic and get approved) at 567 SE Industrial Avenue, Portland, OR 97032. This location is worth investigating for your feasibility study