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Argumentative Essay Graphic Organizer
Name: __________________________________________ Class: ______________________
Directions: Use this graphic organizer to help organize or outline your ideas for your essay. Outlining ideas is a critical component of the writing process.
Introductory Paragraph
Hook: Grab the reader’s attention!!! Start with a great opening sentence to get the reader’s attention — a quote, an outrageous, surprising, or shocking fact, or a relevant statistic.- in the mysterious misty mountains, a hobbit named Bilbo Baggins met a strange creature that changed his life forever.
Give a brief summary: (include the author and title) In the book The Hobbit, written by J.R.R Tolkien, the story follows Bilbo Baggins, a hobbit who embarks on a quest with a group of dwarves and the wizard Gandalf to reclaim the lonely Mountain from the dragon Smaug.
Introduction topic: In The Hobbit, the character of Bilbo undergoes a significant transformation from a terrified hobbit to a brave hero. This transformation is sparked by his encounter with the creature Gollum, which leads to his newfound confidence and a sense of purpose in life.
Thesis: The transformation of Bilbo Baggins from a terrified hobbit to a fearless hero in J.R.R Tolkienś’s The Hobbit is a good example of how one experiences can shape one’s character and lead to personal growth. Bilbo Baggin’s transformation from a terrified to a fearless hero is a clear example of this also through the novel. bilbo meets many different characters and challenges that help him gain a lot of confidence, courage, and resourcefulness, and a huge positive change Body Paragraph #1
Reason #1: (Topic sentence): One reason that Bilbo Baggins transformed from a terrified hobbit to a fearless hobbit to a fearless hero is due to the challenges he faced during his journey.
Evidence (Remember to cite):-´.There is nothing like looking if you want to find something.You certainly usually find something. if you look, but it is not always quite something you were after ́(Tolkien 28).This quote is evidence of Bilbo’s growth and resourcefulness during his journey.
Analysis: (How does the evidence you chose support your thesis?)- this does not only show that Bilbo has shown growth and resourcefulness, but also shows that he has new found patience and determination.. Throughout the journey, Bilbo faces many challenges that forces him to rely on his inner strength, and he has become more patient and has helped him be able to to use it in his quest to find the treasure and reclaim the LOnely mountains with the other drawers. His ability to overcome many different obstacles and he stayed focused on his goal is what led him to achieve his mission, teaching him a very important life lesson about Resolution and determination.
Body Paragraph #2
Reason #2: (Topic sentence with a transition) Another reason why Bilbo transformed from a terrified hobbit to a fearless hero is due to the influence of his companions which are dwarves.
Evidence (Remember to cite):¨There is some good in this world, and it’s worth fighting for¨(Tolkien 146). This quote is evidence of Bilbo’s growth and courage during his journey.
Analysis: (How does the evidence you chose support your thesis?) This quote also shows that Bilbo’s companions have helped him to see the value in fighting for what he believes in. It also shows that Bilbo has become more courageous and is willing to stand up for what is right. It also shows the importance of teamwork and support in achieving one’s goals and reminds us that our beliefs are worth fighting for.
Body Paragraph #3
Counterclaim: (Topic sentence with a transition) Some might argue that Bilbo’s transformation from a terrified hobbit to a fearless hero was due to luck rather than personal growth.Bilbo was lucky to have the ring which helped him avoid danger and overcome obstacles Summarize one reason for the other side of the argument: Bilboś transformation was due to his bravery, resourcefulness, and cleverness, as well as his encounter with the other character of his journey Explain your rebuttal of the counterclaim: While it is true that Bilbo was lucky to have the ring, his transformation was not due to luck only. He also had to face many cha;;enges and make a lot of difficult choices, which helped him to grow and become a stronger person .For example, he had to face Gollum in a riddle game,escaping the dragon smaug. Each of theses challenges had required him to use his courage,and he emerged from them a better and more confident persons.Additional Bilbo´ś encounters with Gandalf and the dwarves helped him to see beyond his sheltered life in the land and he had to a[[ericate the wider world. Therefore, while the ring was certainly a useful too for him , it was his personal growth and development that allowed him to become a true hero Conclusion Paragraph
Restate your main idea (thesis statement) in a new and original way. (Include a transition) In conclusion,Bilbo Baggins’ transformation from a terrified hobbit to a fearless hero in the Hobbit by J.R.R Tolkien is a powerful example of how experiences can shape one’s character and lead them to personal growth.
Summarize the first 2 body paragraphs. Use 2 to 3 sentences to remind your readers of your main points.
Through this journey, Bilbo had faced many challenges and was also influenced by his companions .This experience has helped him to become more resourceful,courageous, and is willing to stand up for wghat is right.
Final statement about your chosen character and how the reader views him in the story: (Remember not to use “I”, “my”, “we”, “our”, “us”, etc.) OR Final statement about why the novel should not be taken out of the curriculum and why it is beneficial to readers:Bilboś transformation to a terrified hobbit to s hero is a good example of how someone can overcome their fears and become a better person.
Remember the “Never in an Essay” points
“Now I’m going to talk about…” (Just tell me!) (Automatic zero if this is in your paper.)
“In this essay I will tell you about…” (Just tell me!) (Automatic zero if this is in your paper.)
“As you can see…” (What if I’m blind?)
“Stuff”, “things”, “bunch”, “kinda”, “gonna” (Not formal language)
Textese (ie: lol, bc, u) (Not formal language) (Automatic zero if this is in your paper.)
Emojis (Just don’t!) (Automatic zero if this is in your paper.)
Quotations without citations (Give credit where credit is due!)
Quotations without introductions (Don’t ever just drop a quotation in a paragraph.)
“This shows that…” (“This” is probably an inanimate object and can’t “show” anything.)
“The author/book talks about…” (What if the author is dead? Do books talk?)
1st or 2nd person pronouns. (See the Editing Reminds.)
Don’t talk about the reader. (You don’t know all of the readers.)
Generalities (Never make generalities as they are usually incorrect!). use this to fix my essay but don’t change alot.Your thesis In The Hobbit, the character of Bilbo undergoes a significant transformation from a terrified hobbit to a fearless hero is a clear example of this also throughout the novel. Question score 14 / 28 Introduction 2 / 4 Your introduction sets up the topic well by mentioning Bilbo’s journey and transformation. To improve, focus on creating a more precise thesis statement. For example, you could say, ‘Bilbo Baggins’ transformation from a timid hobbit to a brave hero in J.R.R. Tolkien’s The Hobbit illustrates the profound impact of adventure and companionship on personal growth.’ Organization 2 / 4 You have a good start with the structure of your essay, including an introduction and body paragraphs. To enhance your organization, avoid repeating the same points. For example, focus on presenting new evidence or perspectives in each paragraph. Language Use 2 / 4 You use some strong vocabulary that is appropriate for the topic. To improve, work on varying your sentence structure and avoiding repetition. For example, instead of repeating the same quote, you could discuss different aspects of Bilbo’s journey. Style & Tone 2 / 4 Your tone is appropriate for an argumentative essay. To strengthen your style, try to incorporate a variety of rhetorical strategies, such as analogies or metaphors, to support your points. For example, you could compare Bilbo’s growth to a seed sprouting into a strong tree. Conclusion 2 / 4 You have provided a conclusion that revisits the main points of your essay. To improve your conclusion, try to synthesize your points without repeating them. For example, you could end with a powerful statement about how Bilbo’s journey reflects the potential for change in all of us. Grammar & Usage 2 / 4 You have a good grasp of grammar, but there are some errors present. To improve, carefully proofread your essay to correct grammatical mistakes. For example, watch out for run-on sentences and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent. Mechanics 2 / 4 Your essay demonstrates an understanding of basic mechanics. To enhance your writing, pay attention to punctuation, such as the proper use of quotation marks and commas. For example, make sure to place periods and commas inside the quotation marks.